I like my room because it is big and I have my own walk-in closet. My room has a lot of closet space and it is a good. Wall are white except one wall is gray. In my room is a bed and three different table. One table is make-up table. In my room also has TV and Xbox and Wii. This room happened a lot of things. In my room I watch Tv or I`m whit my friends. Sometimes we play but usually just hang out. And of course I sleep there alone or with someone. Our house is one level and sometimes in the summer I ran away out of the window.
Before my room is completely pink and I hated it so I painted the walls. I decorated my room all over again. I like my room now but I would like a bigger bed. I my room is a place good and bad things. My cat sleeps in my room. He loves the sheep fleece. My dog does not sleep in my room very often. The room is good for me now.
Creating Worlds 
You live like Carrie Bradshaw with a walk-in closet – how glamorous! I wish you would have explained the ‘good and bad things’, they sound intriguing! Usually rooms are safe havens, so you made me wonder about what the bad things could be… 🙂
– it is _ good (ei artikkeleita ilman substantiivia, good on adjektiivi)
– three different tableS
– A make-up table
– in my room THERE IS also a TV (älä unohda muodollista subjektia ‘there’ kun kerrot, että jossain on jotain)
– A lot of things HAVE HAPPENED in this room (SPOTPA, eli paikka loppuun!)
– witH (use the ABC proofread button!)
– ON one level
– I RUN away (yleispreesens, teet sitä joskus toistuvasti kesäisin)
– before my room WAS pink (käytä imperfektiä kun viittaat menneisyyteen)
– My room IS A PLACE WHERE GOOD AND BAD THINGS happen